For Audience Feedback: I like. The beginning is great; beautiful picture and great font (suits well!). The audio is great and I love the music at at the beginning. The cut when she takes her earphones out is great. The b&w is brilliant, but I think the cuts need to be quicker when the threat is introduce to create more tension. I don't like the shot of Tom with his hand on Charlie's shoulder - doesn't fit the shot before (unless he can disapparate!) I love the ending shot with her running from the camera - great angle! :) Hope this helps!
For Audience Feedback (Conner): Looks good. The bit with the music when it changes to be quiet at first i thought it was an error in the upload but after watching it back i realized my error, so i think that could be improved.Not too sure on what the story is meant to be but that could be my fault, i'm not sure. Overall I think it was overall a good outcome. Good job.
some very nice sound design. But you need to pay more attention to framing and shot composition (TV is primarily a close up medium - and even the BIGGEST films have to be designed to end up on the small screen) The first 1.40 has a certain coherence - not visually stunning, but at least some sense of developing story. But then your narrative falls apart - becoming incoherent and fragmented. Overall, as is the danger with a project like this, if feels more like a trailer than a film opening - but this is probably more a flaw with the brief than the film making.
Overall, some nice things, great sound choices, but let down by a very old fashioned sense of shot composition and pictures.
For Audience Feedback:
ReplyDeleteI like. The beginning is great; beautiful picture and great font (suits well!). The audio is great and I love the music at at the beginning. The cut when she takes her earphones out is great. The b&w is brilliant, but I think the cuts need to be quicker when the threat is introduce to create more tension. I don't like the shot of Tom with his hand on Charlie's shoulder - doesn't fit the shot before (unless he can disapparate!) I love the ending shot with her running from the camera - great angle! :) Hope this helps!
For Audience Feedback (Conner):
ReplyDeleteLooks good. The bit with the music when it changes to be quiet at first i thought it was an error in the upload but after watching it back i realized my error, so i think that could be improved.Not too sure on what the story is meant to be but that could be my fault, i'm not sure. Overall I think it was overall a good outcome. Good job.
some very nice sound design.
ReplyDeleteBut you need to pay more attention to framing and shot composition (TV is primarily a close up medium - and even the BIGGEST films have to be designed to end up on the small screen)
The first 1.40 has a certain coherence - not visually stunning, but at least some sense of developing story. But then your narrative falls apart - becoming incoherent and fragmented.
Overall, as is the danger with a project like this, if feels more like a trailer than a film opening - but this is probably more a flaw with the brief than the film making.
Overall, some nice things, great sound choices, but let down by a very old fashioned sense of shot composition and pictures.
hope this helps
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